Revision history for MakeitScannablePTC


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Last edited on 2018-01-25 08:16:23 by PeterCoffin
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====Thoughts====
- There is a certain difficulty that arises when making a piece, of what is presumably an artistic vision, scannable. Given the message of the passage, it is almost ironic to try to edit the section so as to save time and effort for the user. Certainly in every one of my attempts above, there is some license on my part, an assumption, or speculation in the general meaning, or understanding of the piece. Thus what the user/reader is given is a version that lacks elements from the original, or has had some element added that was not there previously.
- The first two, for example, though containing all the original text, change the meaning visually by highlighting the sections I, the designer, thought the most important in gaining something closest to the whole meaning from three selected phrases. Also note these only differ in manner of highlighting, I could not decide myself which made the text "pop" more, thus making it scannable, while enabling the user to attach context to the phrases if desired.
-This also creates a clear hierarchical convention of important to less important material, all clearly related in a chosen section of text. These phrases could also have been extracted from the surrounding text altogether, but I feel that leaving them in their position sends a message to the user about the origin of the phrases (quotes from a passage) unobtrusively and self-evidently.
-The second two take, perhaps, the most license. Summarizing the passage and thus creating a separate meaning, though closely related, the shortness give the piece a terse, or dense feel, where the original "breathes" more, taking its time with the ideas and images.
-My process in creating these was to simply select each sentence, and reduce it to the fewest words possible that would contain the meaning, and still have a somewhat artistic flair, or at least make coherent sentences.
- You may also note these are reductions of more like 60-80%.
-The last attempt (and my least favorite) is my attempt at a Sparknotes style paraphrasing of main ideas, bulletted for extra scannability. This is probably the most scannable of the five, but also the most removed from the original text/meaning.
-To all the attempts, I added a more conventional author/title line of text, with bold and italics, also a simple signal to the user of what they are looking at.


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Edited on 2018-01-24 08:41:46 by PeterCoffin
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When the shadow of the sash appeared on the curtains it was between seven and eight o' clock and then I was in time again, hearing the watch. It was Grandfather's and when Father gave it to me he said {{color text="I give you the mausoleum of all hope and desire" c="red"}}; it's rather excruciatingly apt that you will use it to gain the reducto absurdum of all human experience which can fit your individual needs no better than it fitted his or his father's. {{color text="I give it to you not that you may remember time, but that you might forget it now and then for a moment and not spend all your breath trying to conquer it." c="red"}} Because no battle is ever won he said. They are not even fought. The field only reveals to man his own folly and despair, and {{color text="victory is an illusion of philosophers and fools" c="red"}}.
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When the shadow of the sash appeared on the curtains it was between seven and eight o' clock and then I was in time again, hearing the watch. It was Grandfather's and when Father gave it to me he said ##{{color text="I give you the mausoleum of all hope and desire" c="red"}}##; it's rather excruciatingly apt that you will use it to gain the reducto absurdum of all human experience which can fit your individual needs no better than it fitted his or his father's. {{color text="I give it to you not that you may remember time, but that you might forget it now and then for a moment and not spend all your breath trying to conquer it." c="red"}} Because no battle is ever won he said. They are not even fought. The field only reveals to man his own folly and despair, and {{color text="victory is an illusion of philosophers and fools" c="red"}}.


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Edited on 2018-01-24 08:40:48 by PeterCoffin
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When the shadow of the sash appeared on the curtains it was between seven and eight o' clock and then I was in time again, hearing the watch. It was Grandfather's and when Father gave it to me he said ##{{color text="I give you the mausoleum of all hope and desire" c="red"}}##; it's rather excruciatingly apt that you will use it to gain the reducto absurdum of all human experience which can fit your individual needs no better than it fitted his or his father's. {{color text="I give it to you not that you may remember time, but that you might forget it now and then for a moment and not spend all your breath trying to conquer it." c="red"}} Because no battle is ever won he said. They are not even fought. The field only reveals to man his own folly and despair, and {{color text="victory is an illusion of philosophers and fools" c="red"}}.
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When the shadow of the sash appeared on the curtains it was between seven and eight o' clock and then I was in time again, hearing the watch. It was Grandfather's and when Father gave it to me he said {{color text="I give you the mausoleum of all hope and desire" c="red"}}; it's rather excruciatingly apt that you will use it to gain the reducto absurdum of all human experience which can fit your individual needs no better than it fitted his or his father's. {{color text="I give it to you not that you may remember time, but that you might forget it now and then for a moment and not spend all your breath trying to conquer it." c="red"}} Because no battle is ever won he said. They are not even fought. The field only reveals to man his own folly and despair, and {{color text="victory is an illusion of philosophers and fools" c="red"}}.


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Edited on 2018-01-24 08:40:17 by PeterCoffin
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When the shadow of the sash appeared on the curtains it was between seven and eight o' clock and then I was in time again, hearing the watch. It was Grandfather's and when Father gave it to me he said {{color text="I give you the mausoleum of all hope and desire" c="red"}}; it's rather excruciatingly apt that you will use it to gain the reducto absurdum of all human experience which can fit your individual needs no better than it fitted his or his father's. {{color text="I give it to you not that you may remember time, but that you might forget it now and then for a moment and not spend all your breath trying to conquer it." c="red"}} Because no battle is ever won he said. They are not even fought. The field only reveals to man his own folly and despair, and {{color text="victory is an illusion of philosophers and fools" c="red"}}.
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When the shadow of the sash appeared on the curtains it was between seven and eight o' clock and then I was in time again, hearing the watch. It was Grandfather's and when Father gave it to me he said ##I give you the mausoleum of all hope and desire##; it's rather excruciatingly apt that you will use it to gain the reducto absurdum of all human experience which can fit your individual needs no better than it fitted his or his father's. ##I give it to you not that you may remember time, but that you might forget it now and then for a moment and not spend all your breath trying to conquer it.## Because no battle is ever won he said. They are not even fought. The field only reveals to man his own folly and despair, and ##victory is an illusion of philosophers and fools.##


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Edited on 2018-01-23 07:50:52 by PeterCoffin
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When the shadow of the sash appeared on the curtains it was between seven and eight o' clock and then I was in time again, hearing the watch. It was Grandfather's and when Father gave it to me he said ##I give you the mausoleum of all hope and desire##; it's rather excruciatingly apt that you will use it to gain the reducto absurdum of all human experience which can fit your individual needs no better than it fitted his or his father's. ##I give it to you not that you may remember time, but that you might forget it now and then for a moment and not spend all your breath trying to conquer it.## Because no battle is ever won he said. They are not even fought. The field only reveals to man his own folly and despair, and ##victory is an illusion of philosophers and fools.##
==**-Faulkner**, //The Sound and the Fury//==
##When the shadow of the sash appeared on the curtains it was between seven and eight o' clock and then I was in time again, hearing the watch. It was Grandfather's and when Father gave it to me he said## I give you the mausoleum of all hope and desire;## it's rather excruciatingly apt that you will use it to gain the reducto absurdum of all human experience which can fit your individual needs no better than it fitted his or his father's.## I give it to you not that you may remember time, but that you might forget it now and then for a moment and not spend all your breath trying to conquer it. ##Because no battle is ever won he said. They are not even fought. The field only reveals to man his own folly and despair, and## victory is an illusion of philosophers and fools.
==**-Faulkner**, //The Sound and the Fury//==
==**-Faulkner**, //The Sound and the Fury//==
Dad gave me a watch and said, "Remember time, forget it, don't fight it, you can't, no one can, we all just die and live."
The watch said it was about 7:30.
==**-Faulkner**, //The Sound and the Fury//==
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==-Faulkner, //The Sound and the Fury//==


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Edited on 2018-01-22 12:52:29 by PeterCoffin
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==**Faulkner**, //The Sound and the Fury//==
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==-Faulkner, //The Sound and the Fury//==


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==-Faulkner, //The Sound and the Fury//==
- Watch represents relentlessness of time, inevitability of death.
- Heirloom passed on by father, also like death.
- Father believed human tendency to battle death and time is pointless.
- Best thing to do is ignore it.


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