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Between seven and eight o'clock the sash's shadow appeared on the curtains. In time, I could hear the watch. Father gave me Grandfather's watch, giving me hope and desire. He said I would use it to gain the reducto absurdum of all human experience and forget time now and then for a moment, not spending all my breath trying to conquer it. No battle is ever won he said. They are not even fought. It only reveals to man his own folly and despair, and victory is an illusion of philosophers and fools.

Faulkner, The Sound and the Fury.

Questions

What did you change in the text? That is, what kinds of changes did you make?
I changed the point of view within some parts of the text. The original text had a different POV when talking about what the father told the narrator. They used 'you' and I changed it to 'I' bringing the whole text into first person. I thought that the change made the text flow better and cut out unnecessary words.

What gave you problems in revising the extract?
The main problem that I had in revising the extract was knowing what could be taken out and what was essential to the text to get a point or mood across. I had never read The Sound and the Fury by Faulkner, so I think that also factored in on not knowing what to take out. It took me awhile to shorten the text up. The wording in general was also a factor in making it hard to revise the text, because there were a lot of ideas that went over my head about time and forgetting time. I don't think that I would have a problem revising the extract if I would have read it previously, but it was hard looking at it without knowing the background of the writing.

How has the meaning changed?
I think that the meaning of the extract is changed by taking out words that could have made the watch seem special. By this, I mean that I took out a little about how important the watch is to his family. The original text said that the watch was given from the grandfather to the father and then to the narrator, and I knocked that meaningful connection the watch had down a notch by simplifying it to "Father gave me Grandfather's watch."
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