David Dixson Email:

Description:

This is an email mesage that is sent from "David Dixson" to "undisclosed-recipients" with a reply-to address "excdavid@googlemail.com" and subject line "Private Message." in bold. The email message itself is all standard text, with the sender's name and UK address at the top followed by six block style paragraphs of text. The first paragraph asks the reader to consider the message and states that the situation is based on facts and details. It states that the author got the reader's email address from an online directory, that the nature of the message is urgent, and that the reader should sincerely trust the author. The second paragraph introduces the author and explains that his client who "bears the same last name as you" works for shell oil and is dead. The third paragraph states that the author has made attempts to find the family of his dead client, and upon finding none has contacted you to "repatriate" his client's deposit. The fourth paragraph describes the deposit in question, a consignment valued at J5550000.00. It says the author was given ten days to find the client's family to give the money too or else the money will be confiscated. The author says he wants to present the reader as the family of the client and then split the money between the two of them. The fifth paragraph offers a gurantee that the reader will be protected from any breaches of law this invloves, and says that everything will be set as soon as the reader replies and accepts the deal. The sixth paragraph requests that the reader get in touch with the author as soon as possible via email or by sending a phone number.

> Now characterize the message and rhetorical situation it addresses mcm<
The message is a scam intended to somehow trick the reader into believing the author and eventually sending him money. Like many scams, the author tries to lure the reader in with reasurring talk about his credibility and the dazzle of large sums of easy money. The author appears to want to establish a criminal partnership with the reader, when in fact he wants to trick the reader. It is a cat-and-mouse relationship...with the cat trying to disguise himself as a mouse to lure the other out.

Analysis:

This message mostly follows the form of a business letter with some elements of email mixed together. That is, some things like the length and the prose of the email are characteristic of a business letter while the medium used for the communication is actually email. The message is long and businesslike, there is no use of short hand commonly found in emails and all proper grammar rules are followed. The author’s style is devoid of any figures of speech, there is no use of irony, personification, or visual imagery. The arrangement roughly follows a problem-solution approach, where you have first the explanation of the client’s death and the money being held, then the solution of how the reader can help get the money and split it 50/50. The author tries to persuade using credibility and a little bit of enthymeme/deductive reasoning. Most of the persuasion is made with the author’s description of the “trust, confidentiality, and sincerity” he claims to have, as a “person of integrity.” By saying that he is an attorney and that he can pull this off while keeping them fully protected from any breach of the law he is attempting to build his credibility. The other main element of persuasion is the enthymeme the author creates, because although it is not stated anywhere in the message explicitly, the hidden point is “I have a plan and with your help we can steal a bunch of money.” The author doesn’t come out and say directly that he wants the reader to be his partner in crime, but it is still the point of the message.
The only pattern of repetition I see in this message is repeated strange grammar, which doesn’t amount of much more than a little “proof” that the person really is from the UK and therefore a bit more credible. Just a bit. The author uses the most persuasive sequencing he can, beginning with descriptive language describing himself and how he found the reader as a reputable and reliable person, he then describes the situation and reveals the purpose of the message, long after the reader’s curiosity has fully engaged him in the reading of the message. The author then reassures the reader that he will be fully protected and ends with a request to get in touch. The main anomalies in the message are the random capitalized words in the middle of sentences, which may have been done for emphasis. The author makes some rather drastic omissions, such as any mention of the name of the client whose last name the reader is supposed to bear and any mention of the specific name of the finance house the money is in.


Robert S. Mueller, III Email

Description:

This is an email mesage that is sent from "ROBERT S. MUELLER, III" to "undisclosed-recipients" with a reply-to address "williamskelvin112@web2mail.com" and subject line "UNITED STATES DEPARTMENT OF JUSTICE." The email message begins with a brief paragraph telling the reader that his payment has been released and that he needs to contact the payment officer Kelvin Williams with his information stated in the next section of the email. The paragraph is followed with the contact information of Kelvin Williams and a section listing the details Kelvin requires, which name, address, phone numbers, occupation, bank name, and age. A brief paragraph follows saying that all documents have been put in place and that the reader should have 110 USD ready for the delivery of his funds via ATM SWIFT CARD. Near the end of the message the author says they are awaiting a response so they can move on with their investigation and make sure the ATM SWIFT CARD is delievered. It ends with Robert's occupation information.

This is also a scam email attempting to trick the reader into sending away some money thinking he will get a larger sum in return. The author attempts to make the reader feel he is the one doing the tricking, by making the message seem to have come to him in error. Basically the author is setting a trap.

Analysis:

This message isn’t quite as much like a business letter as the other message, it’s a little more like an information notice in email form. The message does begin with a greeting of sorts and end with a regard, but those are about the only business letter attributes it contains. The length is about right for an email and for an official notice. The prose and style of the message are most like official notices, where the reader is given the details listed the steps to be executed next. There are no similes, metaphors, uses of personification or irony in the message. The arrangement is primarily topical, logically moving from explanation to action steps required. Persuasion is attempted by the author mainly by using credibility, such as using the name of the director of the FBI. This message also makes use of deductive reasoning like the last but in a different way than the first. This one leaves out a lot of details and seems to lead the reader to feel that the message has come to him/her in error but if they go along with it, they will be able to receive some free money.
The author uses a little bit of repetition when describing the payment form, the “ATM SWIFT CARD” is mentioned in upper case twice and “ATM PAYMENT CENTER” is also in all caps earlier in the message, as if to emphasize the involvement of the highly reputable organization ATM. A lot of omission is used in this message leaving the reader with very little information on how this payment came about and how this information regarding it came to him. Some small blips in punctuation and grammar take away from the credibility of the message somewhat.


Analysis
Use a search model, what techniques and strategies are they using? Genres: Business letter, arguments ('your going to break the law" is a hidden argument), stylistics/prose, ways of reffering to the topic indirectly, *watch for patterns*, etc. etc.
What do they do to create a sense of conspiracy and trust? To create the sense you can get away with it?
Have an analysis done by tuesday, doesnt have to be long but have that ^^^ and the rhetorical situation.

Interpretation:

Dear Sir;

This email is time sensitive and of extreme importance so please read carefully and respond quickly.

My name is David Park, I am an employee at your insurance company and am taking over handling your past claim no.37511843. I am pleased to inform you today that the other driver’s insurance company has unexpectedly sent us a check after all this time. Since you declined to have your vehicle repaired we are prepared to deposit the full amount of the appraised damages ($14,759.80) directly into your personal banking account immediately.

We need you to reply to us by 4:30 PM today with your bank, bank account number and routing number in order to complete the deposit. Your bank information will be kept confidential and destroyed once the deposit has been made.

If we do not get a reply from you by 4:30 PM we will have to send a check to your home address, which we do have on file I believe but of course sending a check is going to take about a week. To get the money right away today please reply with your info and the deposit will be made within the hour and this ordeal will be truly over.

Regards,
David L. Park
Westing Auto Insurance Co.

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