Post Number One


Post Number One Original


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"Ask yourself how much of the pain you suffer in life is because of something you wish somebody else would be, or do, or fix, or transform."

I came across these words from Elizabeth Gilbert this morning, and stopped dead in my tracks.

I am so guilty of this, especially with the people I love the most. Hoping they will release anger, heal the past, stop smoking, eat healthier, live more consciously, go after what truly matters to them, and the list goes on…

I cause myself pain and distress worried about their choices and actions, which is ultimately beyond my control and “energy field,” as Oprah says.

"You don’t have power over your spouse, over your parents, over your neighbors, over your co-workers, over your children … And trying to hold power (even with the best intentions) will only bring you – and them – nothing but suffering."

You have no power here, Amber! That’s my mantra for today (and this month). Along with… Here! Right here inside of your heart, that’s where you hold all the power. For you. For your health. For your actions. For your dreams.

And love! While I can’t fix or change or heal or transform anyone else, I can certainly love with all of my being.

Post Number One Rewrite


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"Ask yourself how much of the pain you suffer in life is because of something you wish somebody else would be, or do, or fix, or transform."

I came across these words from Elizabeth Gilbert this morning, and stopped dead in my tracks.

I am so guilty of this, especially with all of you. Hoping my family or friends will release anger, heal the past, stop smoking, eat healthier, live more consciously, go after what truly matters to them, and the list goes on…

I cause myself pain and distress worried about choices and actions that are not mine to worry about, which is ultimately beyond my control and “energy field,” as Oprah says.

"You don’t have power over your spouse, over your parents, over your neighbors, over your co-workers, over your children … And trying to hold power (even with the best intentions) will only bring you – and them – nothing but suffering."

"You have no power here, Amber!" That’s my mantra for today (and this month). Along with… Here! Right here inside of my heart, that’s where I hold all the power. For me. For my health. For my actions. For my dreams.

And love! While I know I can’t fix or change or heal or transform anyone else, I can certainly love each and every one of you with all of my being.

Post Number Two


Post Number Two Original


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"So what world do you want to live in?"

That’s the question I’m being asked most often as of late.

Here goes!

I want to live in a world where we create the space to hear ourselves—our soft whispers, our inner truth, our deepest longings—and we act and create from this place.

To create this world, I will listen to the quiet pull from within.

It’s this very conviction, and a longing to make self-reflection accessible and easy, that inspired me to create #theworldwewant.

In an age of tech overload and rising unfulfillment, where our days our filled with notifications and pings, many of us have lost touch with what truly matters. It’s going within that will guide us back home. It’s connecting to ourselves and each other that our way forward will reveal itself.

What world do you want to live in?

p.s. I just got 500 of these cards and I’m stoked!

Post Number Two Rewrite


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"So what world do you want to live in?"

That’s the question I've heard from everyone close to me most often as of late.

Here's my attempt to answer you all.

I want to live in a world where we create the space to hear ourselves—our soft whispers, our inner truth, our deepest longings—and we act and create from this place.

To create this world, I will listen to the quiet pull from within.

It’s this very conviction, and a longing to make self-reflection accessible and easy, that inspired me to create the project I've been working on recently.

In an age of tech overload and rising unfulfillment, where our days our filled with notifications and pings, many of us have lost touch with what truly matters. It’s going within that will guide us back home. It’s connecting to ourselves and each other that our way forward will reveal itself.

Let me turn the question around, though.

What world do you, my family and my friends, want to live in?

Observations


In the original posts, the original audience was wide. The blogger avoided identifying specific people in her posts and tended to stick with loose abstracts of who her audience could be. My intent was, since I am most familiar with personal and family-oriented blogs (since those are what I keep track of), to change her blog so that it would become more of a personal-oriented-toward-close-relations blog. I kept the subject matter the same, because I figured that even if her blog was a personal blog as opposed to a public one, she might try to keep her family updated on her project.

My changes did leave space open for friends as well, though, and any time a blogger chooses to open their blog to friends, it becomes an audience which is more varied than a family usually is. Strangers could stumble across this altered blog and take her messages into account for themselves despite the obvious indications of a specific intended audience. One thing that was a noticeable change was the tone of the posts- while the posts that were oriented toward a larger audience seemed to be more inspirational and challenging, I read the changes and realized the post adopted an almost confessional tone. The original posts were more balanced because the alterations added a level of more emotional attachment to the audience. An unknown audience allows for more freedom and distance, but changing the audience to a family dramatically shrinks that distance to something more intimate (but not quite as intimate as sitting down at the table and talking).

I changed the pictures to other things again because of my personal experience with family blogs. A blogger who is more focused on family may offer more inside jokes or references to things their family would recognize- hence, Glinda of the North instead of a vague notecard with an unattributed quote on it. The second picture was changed because I felt that, again in a personal blog, the blogger would typically interact more directly with their audience. The new picture offers a direct challenge to readers, and while it is not as visually appealing, it is more direct and also offers an added dimension to the post, making it imperative that people know what the world in which they want to live is.

In comparison to the CogDogBlog, the HeyAmberRae blog does a much better job of engaging an audience in general. It's interesting to note that while Amber Rae's blog does not have as much content, and the posts are not very lengthy, she engages an audience much more easily than the other blog. This is partly because of the specific audience presented in the CogDogBlog. His posts are thoroughly involved in very specific concepts, which make it somewhat difficult for those who are unsure of what those elements are to follow his posts easily. His posts also tend to ramble and walk all over, whereas Amber's posts tend to be succinct and focus on one specific subject.

Meyer's observations about blogs that successfully engage an audience seem to fit with Amber's posts more than the CogDogBlog. His blog seems more focused on a specific set audience, and he even lays out his rules for interactions with readers rather explicitly, which may be very intimidating for many readers. In contrast, though, Amber's posts are so vacuous that her audience engagement does not encourage as direct of a response. Both blogs do have an audience, presumably, and both are reasonably successful in finding the audience that would be the right audience. TheCogDogBlog would engage his right audience more easily and thoroughly than Amber would engage her right audience. This is an interesting thing to take into account when both writing and reading, as choosing and finding language suitable for a certain audience would impact both ends of the production of text and context.
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